A Wilderness Survival Program高中英语作文
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Saturday, May 4, 2002 cloudy
Li Ming and I took part in a wilderness survival program yesterday, and it has been one of the most unforgettable experiences since high school.
The two of us were to reach the campsite by the evening. We set out early in the morning, eager to face the adventure. I was carring a camp and a compass in my bag, while Li Ming loaded his with some bread, matches, candles, a map, a knife, afirst-aid kit, a flashlight, and some clothes. We followed the marked route until we reached a brook.. We had to swim across it, floating our supplies on a piece of wood in order to keep them dry. What’s worse, we lost sight of the signs on the other side of the brook! Thanks to the campass, we finally arrived at the campsite on time, and managed to make the camp and afire.
The two of us spent the night in the forest.
We learned to use knowledge gained in clASSroom training to solve problems. It was quite an experience for us both, which I’ll never forget for the rest of my life.
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